I wrote a poem for a class I'm taking. You can see the huge difference between the rough draft and the final. (If the rough draft gives you a headache, don't read it.) I've had a lot of fun writing it, I've come far trying to make it as neat as possible. If you're wondering why I ever would post all three drafts on here, it's another assignment (I have quite a bit of fun blogging for my homework). Here it is, I hope you enjoy it. I would bold the changes to make it more interesting, but there's too many. Good luck.
Final Draft
I have the heavy burden of facing off evil.
Those who love me and those who hate me know me well.
Without me, darkness would run wild in the streets and storms would rage in dark clouds.
Neither can live while the other survives, whether that means the darkness or me.
With no one to support you, these challenges get lonelier and harder than they already are.
However, that is not the case.
I have great friends, all of whom are brave enough to stand with me.
My enemies have much to say about me,
But, by the end of my story, I want to be remembered as I really am, not who they say I am.
I am Magic Heart, but I have spoken for Harry Potter.
Third Draft
I have the heavy burden of doing my homework and facing off evil.
Those who love me and those who hate me know me well.
Without me, darkness would run wild in the streets and storms would rage in dark clouds.
Neither can live while the other survives, whether that means the evil or me.
With no one to support you, these challenges get lonelier and harder than they already are.
However, that is not the case.
I have great friends, all of whom are brave enough to stand with me.
My enemies have much to say about me,
But, by the end of my story, I want to be remembered as I really am, not who they say I am.
Today, I have seen through two different pairs of eyes… four including both sets of glasses.
I am Magic Heart, but I have spoken for Harry Potter.
Second Draft
Right now I live in two countries at once: America and England.
I have gray eyes and brown hair, but also green eyes and black hair.
I feel a scar next to my eye and on my forehead.
I have the heavy burden of doing my homework and facing off evil.
I am invisible to all except those who hate me or love me.
Without me, though, darkness would destroy and storms would rage.
But, for now, I am invisible.
If only the entire world was on my side.
With no one to support you, life’s challenges get lonelier and harder than they already are.
Only one can live while the other dies, whether that means the evil or me.
I can’t run from my destiny, but at least I will not be alone.
I have my friends and those who are brave enough to stand with me.
I want to be remembered as I really am, not who my enemies say I am.
S
oon, I will live only in America and have one set of
characteristics.
However, as of now, I see through two different pairs of
eyes… four including both sets of glasses.
I am Magic Heart, but I have spoken for Harry Potter.
First Draft
Right now I am in two countries at once: America and England.
I have blue eyes and brown hair, but also green eyes and
black hair.
I feel a scar next to my eye and on my forehead.
I have the heavy burden of facing off evil and doing my
homework.
I am invisible to all except those who hate me or love me.
The trouble makers wish I wasn’t there.
My friends would go with me to the end… or at least think
about it.
Without me, darkness would rampage.
But, for now, I am invisible.
The world needs to hear the message I wish to share.
The world should be on my side.
With no one to support you, it gets lonelier and harder
than it already is with all of the challenges life throws.
They don’t have to have magic or step way out of the way,
they just have to be my friends.
If nothing, they can’t knock me down.
My friends and family are dear to me, so if I don’t come
back one day, want them to stay safe and not mourn forever.
Dying will only reunite me with those I have lost along
the path.
Only one can live while the other dies, whether that
means evil or me.
I will try my best to succeed, but there will be
sacrifices.
My life is a good story, but it isn’t easy to live that
tale.
It is my destiny.
I can’t run from it.
At least, I will not be alone.
I have my friends and those who will be brave enough to
stand with me.
I want to be remembered as I really am, not who my
enemies say I am.
Soon, I will live only in America and have one set of
characteristics.
However, as of now, I see through two different pairs of
eyes… four including both sets of glasses.
I am Magic Heart, but I have spoken for Harry Potter.
Rough Draft
Right now I am in two countries at once. I a m both Harryp Otter and anMagic
Heart. I Live in both America and
England. I bo to both high school and
Hogwarts. I am a muggle and a wizard. I
have green and eyes and blue. I have balck ahir and brown. I am a teenage girl
and a teenage boty. I have the heavey
buden of facing of f Voldemort and
dloing my homwework. Harry wishes to
tellsay that he it s the only one thatwho an save the world from the dark
wizards. While Magic, on the other hadn,
says that she has to finish her creative wrtieing assignment. Harry wins.
He has a powerful mind , wone that overpowers my noonmagic one anyday. He doesn’t really ne. jI am the link between him and the rest of
the worldl he is invislibe to all except those who hate him or love him. The dursleys and the death eaters know him
well and wish he wasn’t there. This
friends Hermione and ron Weasley would
die before they let him die. SDnape
wouldn’t care if he vanished off the face ofn the earth, Doumbledcore need him
for sa plane of great importance.
Without him , Voldemort would take ofvedr. But, for now, he is invislbe. The muggles don’t kreally know he exists. But
I,, with him insides me. Telling me what
ito write, asking me to write to for him. , I can’t igonore him. I can’t refuse to seack what he whants the
world to sayhera. ?He needs them world
to remember him. He needs to he wourdl
to be one his wised.e With no one wone to support you, he says, it’ gets very
lonely and harder than the it already is , with all of the challenges he goes
through. He has to face Voldemort eveyr
year, mulptiple times, so the least everyone can do is support him.. They don’t
have to help him with magic ofr actually defeating Voldemort, they just have to
believe him and be his friends. They
jcan’t reidulce him or call him insane anyomroe . He is a vey normal hreo and
shouldn’t be treated like a insane criminal.
He kalso wishes to say that he loves Ginny Wealsdely and all his
friends, so if he dones’t come back one day. He wants the m to stay safe and
not rtty to get revenge. Only on e can
live while the other doies. He doesn’t
want to the be the one that perishes in, but he dones’t really have a
choice. If Voldemort it s to o strong,
he will fail. That’s just life for one
of the m ost famous peopltenenage boys in all of the world. I , cora hammer do not dney tah. I kidn of want ot get back to the life of
just dreaming of the mgagic world jinstead of lvinign it with haryy potter . it
isn’t fair to make a fmuggle girl do the work othat really should have been
harryp opotter ‘s . However, that it sis
not up to me. I whave to fkeep writing
and already I’m going to far off subject form where harpy porter whatnatds me
to be. It do that--. He arry wants me to say that he will try this
best , but he wants us to know that it isn’t without sarcrifice. He dknow s that his life is a good story, but
people often ouverlook how diffifulct it wactually is to live that stale. The reality is harsh, but he will altlasest chas
to bear it. It his is destinty. He can’t run from it. He can’t hide from it It is part of him. Not to mention it oculd have been Neville
Longbottom’s --. Back to Harryp
owtter. He says thsy dhe wants to see
his lsot famliolky again anywawy, so don’t tbe to said tif he has to leave this wordl. He will just be reunited with his
family. The people that he lsot if n the
along the path of his wicked destinthy.
At least, he says, he will not bne alone,. /he has if his frineds and , hopefully, by the
end iof this, he will whave you. The
reader of theis pager. That’s was all he
needed to explain. All that he really
wanted to sasy. But I think there is
more. Being inside harry. , I know all his thoughts. He want s people to remember him as a good
hero. One hathat wasn’t a coward or a
lunatic or a selfish man. He want sto be
remembered as he was. That his sotry may
not be forgotten. He is too humble to
actually admit that. <but that is
nhow he is feleling. It is impossible to
say more, because he is pre enting me from viewing oand writing all the secrets
of his heart and all the thoughts of his brilliant mind. I can feel his scar. I can see thourhg his
eyes. He knows I want to write more bu,t
kj obcviuosouly, he can’t let me. It is
too special to heim to slety hme share.
But if I could, I would explain all about who harryp porter is. I would share all the unqiue details that
interest he is a great guy and heis rstory wshould be told wide far and
wide. It isn’t just me either. His friends also think so It would prevent
lies getting out about him. It would
prevent discrediters and thieves of a famous , glorious life. Of a amazing
life. He wishes hme to say that he w he is just harry. Bu, I know that he
isn’t. is the is the fthe y boy who live
the chosen one and Harryp Potter. He
isn’